答案優(yōu)選I’m 18 years old (建議：加上性別a boy/girl?) and my hometown is in xxxx, a place with picturesque scenery. I just finished my secondary education one and a half months ago from Huangshi No.2 Secondary School.
I’ve gained some understanding about the National University of Malaysia (NUM) since I was in my freshman year of high school; I like it not only because Malaysia is a beautiful country, but also because NUM is a famous university in South-east Asia and even worldwide.
Moreover, as I like reading very much, what NUM attracts me the most is that the library in NUM which is the biggest one both in size and the amount of book collections over the South-east Asia.
My option for major is Business Administration – International Trade, taking the fact into consideration that NUM is listed as one of the world’s top 100 universities ranking in terms of science and technology.
I am a lively open and bright guy with a touchy-feel manner; I could be sensitive with interpersonal relationship, interactions and dealing with matters but full of confidence as well.
I wish I could be able to engage in an occupation of my interest in my future’s career.
Speaking of my hobbies, I like music, movies and also sports. I often join my family for badminton, hiking and travelling.
My father is a self-employed businessman, and my mother works in marketing area for a big sized state-owned enterprise. Both of them have a monthly wage over RMB 4000 yuan.
My parents are very open-minded and always being crazy about me. They respect all my choices and what they care the most is if I can live happily, healthily and peacefully.
To achieve academic success through hard studying is believed the best way to give my parents a better return favor in future.
幾點建議：
1. 因為你選修的是工商管理國際貿易專業(yè)，你的英文水平怎樣，都參加過那些國際知名英語水平測試（雅思成績有沒？）
2. 介紹一下電腦水平如何，如Office軟件的應用
3. 如果能將你本人的介紹再豐富一些，特別是加上一些社會活動事例的簡介就更好了。